l***y
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or
发帖数: 720 | 2 first try, am picking bones out of an egg..
he
that.
closest
^^^
did?
^^^^^^^^
marched?
the
and
^^^^^^^^
not matched with "light" in grammar. delete "looking"?
each
The
some
^^^^^ ^^^^^^^^^
wa
【在 l***y 的大作中提到】
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l***y
发帖数: 791 | 3 1 is about a rainy night trip home and can be found at prose board JHQ. that
one is definately rated G.
http://www.mitbbs.com/cgi-bin/BBSanc?/groups/GROUP_4/Prose/original/hn/lynny/M
.1033435810.A
maybe
he
that.
closest
the
the
escaped
and
each
The
Money,
some
the
out
door.
to
(again)
outside,
slowly
point |
or
发帖数: 720 | 4 (snip)
Her shoulder felt chilled. The sheets softly warmed her body in a phantom
caress. It smelled of him, mostly. Despite of the diabolic bellows of
‘Gooooooaaaaaal---Gooooooaaaaaal---Gooooooaaaaaal----’ coming from outside,
those insidious body parts kept reminding her that they were getting slowly
roasted on invisible fire. She felt dizzy with vertigo. The TV at one point
flipped to the sober and genteel commentary of the History Channel. It went on
and on about Japanese suicide planes in WW |
l***y
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outside,
on
my understanding is that both suicide and suicidal work. see m-w dictionary:
ka·mi·ka·ze
Pronunciation: "kä-mi-'kä-zE
Function: noun
Etymology: Japanese, literally, divine wind
Date: 1945
1 : a member of a Japanese air attack corps in World War II assigned to
make a suicidal crash on a target (as a ship)
2 : an airplane containing explosives to be flown in a suicide crash on a
target
here we see "air attack corp" and "suicide crash" and
【在 or 的大作中提到】
: (snip)
: Her shoulder felt chilled. The sheets softly warmed her body in a phantom
: caress. It smelled of him, mostly. Despite of the diabolic bellows of
: ‘Gooooooaaaaaal---Gooooooaaaaaal---Gooooooaaaaaal----’ coming from outside,
: those insidious body parts kept reminding her that they were getting slowly
: roasted on invisible fire. She felt dizzy with vertigo. The TV at one point
: flipped to the sober and genteel commentary of the History Channel. It went on
: and on about Japanese suicide planes in WW
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l***y
发帖数: 791 | 6 cleaned up the oopsies. ok now, how should i clean this one up a bit? @.@
maybe
the
escaped
Money,
the
【在 or 的大作中提到】
: first try, am picking bones out of an egg..
:
: he
: that.
: closest
: ^^^
: did?
: ^^^^^^^^
: marched?
: the
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