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发帖数: 194 | 1 Chapter 5.2, Ride with Michael Back to His Studio
The April night still felt cool once they were outside. The moon strode lonely
over the skyscrapers, flooding silvery light that overshadowed the beams from
the seemingly tired streetlights. In the distance there seemed to be some icy
blue-hued fog floating in mire. Sirens traveled through from several blocks
away. But this street was very quiet and the cars on both sides seemed to have
fallen asleep.
Daishan looked up at the moon over Manhattan, | y**g
发帖数: 194 | 2 Yeah, that's a totally wrong choice of word. I seemed to forget the meanings
of words sometimes, if I don't consultwith dictionaries. When I reread, I
found so many wrong choices of word, like I used "travellers" instead of
"tourists," "poor business" insead of "slow business" etc. I will use this
piece as homework for the the Gotham writing class I am taking right now and
will try to revise over and over, and possibly reflect all your guy's
suggestions in the final draft. The same thanks as som |
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