c****2 发帖数: 345 | 1 San Francisco 2013
It's been fifteen years
Since I last saw your face
A few more houses
Line your hills
Like birds perching on their nests
More crowded than Los Angeles
To keep in the warmth and love?
In Fisherman's Wharf
The cute little salesgirl
Is Euro-Asian
Kind of your essence?
Replacing the seals are
Rows of sailboats
Progress is understood
As long as it's progressive
And not aggressive
The East Wind Bookstore
Is still there
China has advanced
Chinatown has not
The Northern star
Our point of reference
The hometown to look back on
A fair priced apple there
Is the best I have tasted for a long while
Maximum profit squeezes out
The sweetness of the apple
And the juice of life
On the side walk
Inscribed "Jack Kerouac"
Was that Jack's imagination
Yours or mine ?
I did not sip any
Of your new wine
All the same
Was intoxicated by old friendship
uninterrupted by time
Woke up this morning
The sunlight looks the same
But a little brighter
My steps a little lighter |
b*s 发帖数: 82482 | 2 Nice
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【在 c****2 的大作中提到】 : San Francisco 2013 : It's been fifteen years : Since I last saw your face : A few more houses : Line your hills : Like birds perching on their nests : More crowded than Los Angeles : To keep in the warmth and love? : In Fisherman's Wharf : The cute little salesgirl
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a******e 发帖数: 6689 | 3 哇,写得真不错,cynical之中蕴含了很多sweetness。除了有几句不够smooth and
squeezed, 整体很统一真挚。 |
l********1 发帖数: 5909 | 4 顶一下我最爱的城市!
【在 c****2 的大作中提到】 : San Francisco 2013 : It's been fifteen years : Since I last saw your face : A few more houses : Line your hills : Like birds perching on their nests : More crowded than Los Angeles : To keep in the warmth and love? : In Fisherman's Wharf : The cute little salesgirl
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w***r 发帖数: 7173 | 5 写得很赞.
感觉去掉最后一段, 用uninterrupted by time那段来结尾效果会更好. |
s**t 发帖数: 17016 | 6 蛮好的,我喜欢
【在 c****2 的大作中提到】 : San Francisco 2013 : It's been fifteen years : Since I last saw your face : A few more houses : Line your hills : Like birds perching on their nests : More crowded than Los Angeles : To keep in the warmth and love? : In Fisherman's Wharf : The cute little salesgirl
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c****2 发帖数: 345 | 7 谢谢各位,大家也说说你的SF印象嘛,这到底是个令人不能释怀的城市。 |
H******9 发帖数: 8087 | |
b*******r 发帖数: 1073 | 9 Nice...
【在 c****2 的大作中提到】 : San Francisco 2013 : It's been fifteen years : Since I last saw your face : A few more houses : Line your hills : Like birds perching on their nests : More crowded than Los Angeles : To keep in the warmth and love? : In Fisherman's Wharf : The cute little salesgirl
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b*s 发帖数: 82482 | 10 peng!
Nice...
【在 b*******r 的大作中提到】 : Nice...
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