j****n
发帖数: 4358 | 1 有问题请大家更正，最后结尾不知道怎么写，谢谢
Re: SUPPORT SB218(Yee)
Dear Mr. Chairman and Members of the Committee:
Traditional Chinese Medicine (TCM) Traumatology, together with Acupuncture,
is another main branch of Traditional Chinese Medicine which has been used
for treatment of patients for centuries. Different from Acupuncture,
Traditional Chinese Medicine Traumatology is more about bone-setting.
Numerious patients have benefited from the treatment of Traditional
Chinese Medicine Traumatology in China. Contrasted with standard western
treatments which often rely on invasive techniques, In Traditional Chinese
Medicine Traumatology , Non-invasive “Maneuver therapy ” was used to
correct bone-related injury and disease, dislocations, injuries of the
muscles, tendons and ligaments etc.
Traditional Chinese Medicine Traumatology have been used widely in China. It
is well known that China athletics’ success in Olympics and other world
sports competition. Behind those, the secret is actually those Traditional
Chinese Medicine Traumatologist helped the China athletics their injury in
sports competition so that they could have better performance. Although
being introduced in 1800’s accompanying with the first coming Chinese
immigrants building the railroads , TCM Traumatology is still not approved
officially. In this case, The TCM Traumatologist can not really do much to
help those patients under current law.
I have been having neck and back problems after the accident in 2005. I
have been looking for the right TCM Traumatologist who can help me. Finally,
I am glad a group of such practioners exist in the state of California and
have been providing highly skilled care. So it is necessary that the
lawmakers can include this in our medical system so that there will be more
certified TCM Traumatologist and more regulations in this field.
Actually, Californian’s economy will also get benefits from this bill.
After Acupuncture is approved in our medical system, many jobs related with
Acupuncture education and devices etc have been generated. Many students
have been striving to be Acupuncturist. Similar thing will happen when TCM
Traumatology is approved in our state. Most importantly, TCM Traumatology
provides an alternate efficient treatment from the standard treatment in low
cost, thus to reduce the cost of health care insurance.
It takes 19 years for Acupuncture to be approved. I hope I will not need to
wait so long to see that for TCM Traumatology. I urge our lawmakers can
have the vision and use your wisdom to vote for this bill benefitting of
our Californians. | wh
发帖数: 141625 | 2 最后一段我觉得挺好的。第一段最好有点问候致意。张口就像上课一样说traditional
chinese medicine有点突兀。
traditional chinese medicine traumatology不知道是否有更正式的翻译，这个短语
听上去好像有点不太通顺？
第二段有语法错误。“It is well known that China athletics’success in
Olympics and other world sports competition”从句缺少谓语，athletics应该是
athlete，后面一句也是。后面一句也不通，可能改成help the athletes treat their
injuries好一点。
另外argument是否可以更完善些。中国运动员的成功只是因为这种中医治疗，这个
argument太强势了，不太convincing。后一段以自己为例，又太孤单了，不足以成为推
广的理由。最好多些证人，联名上书之类，呵呵。
,
【在 j****n 的大作中提到】
: 有问题请大家更正，最后结尾不知道怎么写，谢谢
: Re: SUPPORT SB218(Yee)
: Dear Mr. Chairman and Members of the Committee:
: Traditional Chinese Medicine (TCM) Traumatology, together with Acupuncture,
: is another main branch of Traditional Chinese Medicine which has been used
: for treatment of patients for centuries. Different from Acupuncture,
: Traditional Chinese Medicine Traumatology is more about bone-setting.
: Numerious patients have benefited from the treatment of Traditional
: Chinese Medicine Traumatology in China. Contrasted with standard western
: treatments which often rely on invasive techniques, In Traditional Chinese
| j****n
发帖数: 4358 | 3 traditional chinese medicine traumatology就是通常所说的跌打骨伤科。
traditional
their
【在 wh 的大作中提到】
: 最后一段我觉得挺好的。第一段最好有点问候致意。张口就像上课一样说traditional
: chinese medicine有点突兀。
: traditional chinese medicine traumatology不知道是否有更正式的翻译，这个短语
: 听上去好像有点不太通顺？
: 第二段有语法错误。“It is well known that China athletics’success in
: Olympics and other world sports competition”从句缺少谓语，athletics应该是
: athlete，后面一句也是。后面一句也不通，可能改成help the athletes treat their
: injuries好一点。
: 另外argument是否可以更完善些。中国运动员的成功只是因为这种中医治疗，这个
: argument太强势了，不太convincing。后一段以自己为例，又太孤单了，不足以成为推
| wh
发帖数: 141625 | 4 噢，谢谢。
忘了说，想起amy tan的小说the bonesetter's daughter，接骨师的女儿。
【在 j****n 的大作中提到】
: traditional chinese medicine traumatology就是通常所说的跌打骨伤科。
:
: traditional
: their
| c********g
发帖数: 1106 | 5 请牢记八股文格式 八股文格式 八股文格式 八股文格式 八股文格式 八股文格式
八股文格式 八股文格式！我看两句就没耐心看了。议员们不会比我有时间有耐心。
,
【在 j****n 的大作中提到】
: 有问题请大家更正，最后结尾不知道怎么写，谢谢
: Re: SUPPORT SB218(Yee)
: Dear Mr. Chairman and Members of the Committee:
: Traditional Chinese Medicine (TCM) Traumatology, together with Acupuncture,
: is another main branch of Traditional Chinese Medicine which has been used
: for treatment of patients for centuries. Different from Acupuncture,
: Traditional Chinese Medicine Traumatology is more about bone-setting.
: Numerious patients have benefited from the treatment of Traditional
: Chinese Medicine Traumatology in China. Contrasted with standard western
: treatments which often rely on invasive techniques, In Traditional Chinese
| j****n
发帖数: 4358 | 6 什么是八股文格式?
【在 c********g 的大作中提到】
: 请牢记八股文格式 八股文格式 八股文格式 八股文格式 八股文格式 八股文格式
: 八股文格式 八股文格式！我看两句就没耐心看了。议员们不会比我有时间有耐心。
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