r*****n
发帖数: 972 | 1 我的具体情况见 http://www.mitbbs.com/article_t0/Reunion/31427509.html
今晚看了smallfox的回帖，把自己的信又大刀阔斧的改了一下，已经改了不下十几遍了
，但是还是有很多问题，发上来请大家讨论讨论。
To Whom It May Concern:
My name is XXX, an F-1 PhD candidate at XXX University. I would greatly
appreciate it if you could grant my parents B-2 visas for a three-week trip
to the US during my father’s winter break.
这段是最纠结的。There are two primary purposes of this planned trip, family
reunion and sightseeing. （因为1000拒的时候，VO问道很多我没回国的话题，这次
是否有必要特意解释一下？但是一解释，感觉说的就有些繁琐，不解释，怕这次仍然被
纠结。如果按照smallfox的观点，B2来美的原因不重要，关键是回国的约束力，是否就
可以不解释呢？简单说一下来美的行程即可？）Even though I have been keeping in
touch with my parents by phone and video chat closely, I am still hoping to
be living together with them for some time, particularly during Chinese
traditional holidays. （听从smallfox的建议，淡化了一下亲情，强调了这几年的联
系，这样写是否还是不妥？还是压根就不提这方面？）I have thought about going
back to see them; however, I am very busy studying and am involved in
various research projects in order to finish my PhD as soon as possible.
Therefore, it is quite difficult to find a vacation that is long enough for
this journey. （不知道这样解释是否可以？虽然是千篇一律，可是实际情况也就这样
，实在没有想到其他的可说的。）On the other hand, my parents have never
visited me before and I really want to show them my life, American culture
and the traditions here. In addition, Spring Festival is right in the middle
of my father’s winter break. So, we both agree it’s a good solution that
my parents take a three-week tour to the US this winter.
My father is a Middle School Senior Teacher and my mother is mainly working
on their farm. They are in good financial condition at our hometown,
Shandong Province, with a stable annual income of around XXX RMB and savings
of around XXX RMB. In addition, they have their own house. All these
factors can ensure their high quality of life there. For this visit, my
parents will pay for travel expenses like airfare and tourism costs while I
will provide them with living expenses here.
My parents will return to China before spring semester begins at Xuezhuang
Middle School, where my father is teaching or he would lose his job which he
has really enjoyed as a teacher for more than twenty years. Their farm,
which is being primarily operated by my mother, needs to be taken care of as
well. Also, they cannot be apart for too long from their normal life with
their daughter, son-in-law, granddaughter, siblings and friends, with whom
they have been living very closely. (还在纠结后面这几句是否有画蛇添足之嫌，
说太多是否反而会引起怀疑？) It’s impossible for them to give up these jobs,
relatives and relationships that they have been used to and relying on for
their whole life. In addition, they have nothing and can do nothing (cannot
speak English) but sightsee here in the US.
For your convenience, I have attached a list of supporting documents to this
letter. As my parents cannot speak English and may have some accent, I
truly appreciate your patience and kind consideration. Should you need any
further information, please feel free to contact me at XXXX (I can be
reached at this number 24/7).
Sincerely,
XXXX | r*****n
发帖数: 972 | 2 Up
trip
family
【在 r*****n 的大作中提到】
: 我的具体情况见 http://www.mitbbs.com/article_t0/Reunion/31427509.html
: 今晚看了smallfox的回帖，把自己的信又大刀阔斧的改了一下，已经改了不下十几遍了
: ，但是还是有很多问题，发上来请大家讨论讨论。
: To Whom It May Concern:
: My name is XXX, an F-1 PhD candidate at XXX University. I would greatly
: appreciate it if you could grant my parents B-2 visas for a three-week trip
: to the US during my father’s winter break.
: 这段是最纠结的。There are two primary purposes of this planned trip, family
: reunion and sightseeing. （因为1000拒的时候，VO问道很多我没回国的话题，这次
: 是否有必要特意解释一下？但是一解释，感觉说的就有些繁琐，不解释，怕这次仍然被
| i******t
发帖数: 22541 | 3 说一下我的观点
I have thought about going
back to see them; however, I am very busy studying and am involved in
various research projects in order to finish my PhD as soon as possible.
Therefore, it is quite difficult to find a vacation that is long enough for
this journey.
On the other hand, my parents have never
visited me before and I really want to show them my life, American culture
and the traditions here. In addition, Spring Festival is right in the middle
of my father’s winter break. So, we both agree it’s a good solution that
my parents take a three-week tour to the US this winter.
这个有必要这么解释吗？ 感觉太中国话了。而且这段写了这么多，太多太去强调这个
问题了。 直接写 就是家庭团聚。至于你为啥多年没回去 就不用写， 他们问 你妈的
时候， 你教教她如何回答就行。
XXX RMB and savings
of around XXX RMB. In addition,
具体数目需要些吗？ 可能多的话 写有点用吧。
or he would lose his job 这个也是废话 感觉
It’s impossible for them to give up these jobs,
relatives and relationships that they have been used to and relying on for
their whole life. In addition, they have nothing and can do nothing (cannot
speak English) but sightsee here in the US.
这些都是屁话。我看完第一感觉就是 怎么这么罗嗦啊。
不如开个单位的请假条 上面写回去的时间 作为证据，比这么罗嗦的陈述有利吧
我觉得你的 还有很大问题
1精简2那事实说话，别弄些个人感受的东西3强调你的优势，淡化你的不足。 但是让你
妈准备一下可能的回答。
trip
family
【在 r*****n 的大作中提到】
: 我的具体情况见 http://www.mitbbs.com/article_t0/Reunion/31427509.html
: 今晚看了smallfox的回帖，把自己的信又大刀阔斧的改了一下，已经改了不下十几遍了
: ，但是还是有很多问题，发上来请大家讨论讨论。
: To Whom It May Concern:
: My name is XXX, an F-1 PhD candidate at XXX University. I would greatly
: appreciate it if you could grant my parents B-2 visas for a three-week trip
: to the US during my father’s winter break.
: 这段是最纠结的。There are two primary purposes of this planned trip, family
: reunion and sightseeing. （因为1000拒的时候，VO问道很多我没回国的话题，这次
: 是否有必要特意解释一下？但是一解释，感觉说的就有些繁琐，不解释，怕这次仍然被
| r*****n
发帖数: 972 | 4 To Whom It May Concern:
My name is XXX, an F-1 PhD candidate at XXX University. I would greatly
appreciate it if you could grant my parents B-2 visas for a three-week trip
to the US during my father’s winter break.
There are two primary purposes of this planned trip, family reunion and
sightseeing. Even though I have been keeping in touch with my parents by
phone and video chat closely, I am still hoping to be living together with
them for some time, particularly during Chinese traditional holidays. On the
other hand, my parents have never visited me before and I really want to
show them my life, American culture and the traditions here. In addition,
Spring Festival is right in the middle of my father’s winter break. So, we
both agree it’s a good solution that my parents take a three-week tour to
the US this winter. We plan to visit New York City and Washington DC
together.
My father is a Middle School Senior Teacher and my mother is mainly working
on their farm. They are in good financial condition at our hometown,
Shandong Province, with a stable annual income of around XXX RMB and savings
of around XXX RMB. In addition, they have their own house. All these
factors can ensure their high quality of life there. For this visit, my
parents will pay for travel expenses like airfare and tourism costs while I
will provide them with living expenses here.
My parents will return to China before spring semester begins at Xuezhuang
Middle School, where my father is teaching or he would lose his job which he
has really enjoyed as a teacher for more than twenty years. Their farm,
which is being primarily operated by my mother, needs to be taken care of as
well. Also, they cannot be apart for too long from their normal life with
their daughter, son-in-law, granddaughter, siblings and friends, with whom
they have been living very closely.
For your convenience, I have attached a list of supporting documents to this
letter. As my parents cannot speak English and may have some accent, I
truly appreciate your patience and kind consideration. Should you need any
further information, please feel free to contact me at XXXX (I can be
reached at this number 24/7). | i******t
发帖数: 22541 | | r*****l
发帖数: 2859 | 6 我觉得：
1，不用说你父亲挣多少钱，可以侧重说他在学校多重要，如果他是senior teacher。
比如说他是哪个教研组的头头。或者说他们村里几代人，或者包括校长在内的很多老师
都是他的学生... 如果这些适用。另外，可以说学校对他有多重要。从侧面之处他和学
校在感情上联系很深。
2，My mother owns a farm。听起来好听些。
3，我觉得你可以说出这样的意思：所有父母都关心孩子，你虽然每周都和他们视频，
和他们说你的生活怎么怎么好，要他们不要担心，但他们只有“亲眼”看到你的生活，
才会真正放心。所以他们一定要抽出几周的时间来看你一次。（否则他们不愿意跑
这么远路。）我本来是要写在我的邀请信里的，但是我的篇幅已经不短了，所以我把这
段删掉了。
4，我觉得不用提“he would lose his job”。如果适用，可以说“他的教研组新学期
需要他的领导”，或者“他有几个奥数班的学生在等他”...
5，也可以说说你妈妈和农场里面的狗呀，牛呀，羊呀等等感情都很好。离开的时候她
会很惦记它们。美国人吃这套。
trip
family
【在 r*****n 的大作中提到】
: 我的具体情况见 http://www.mitbbs.com/article_t0/Reunion/31427509.html
: 今晚看了smallfox的回帖，把自己的信又大刀阔斧的改了一下，已经改了不下十几遍了
: ，但是还是有很多问题，发上来请大家讨论讨论。
: To Whom It May Concern:
: My name is XXX, an F-1 PhD candidate at XXX University. I would greatly
: appreciate it if you could grant my parents B-2 visas for a three-week trip
: to the US during my father’s winter break.
: 这段是最纠结的。There are two primary purposes of this planned trip, family
: reunion and sightseeing. （因为1000拒的时候，VO问道很多我没回国的话题，这次
: 是否有必要特意解释一下？但是一解释，感觉说的就有些繁琐，不解释，怕这次仍然被
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