s**t
发帖数: 17016 | 1 raindrops roll down the slope of sky
and bounce back to the air from the seesaw of grasses
i am a raindrop, a note
detached from a tapestry of symphony
leap on leaf-keys
each leaf opens its eye
at the moment the raindrop touches
i am a raindrop, a note
a drop of birdsong dripping from the void
no vase can hold it
finally, the raindrop lands the ear of sea
undersea there are shells listening
my death is the tiny bloom
of a liquid flower
no vase can hold the flower
in a nonexistent canoe, in a coffin
open in all directions
i slip deep into the black forest
of dreams |
t********a
发帖数: 946 | 2 都是诗歌儿"惹的祸”～～
读到最后一句，
My heart slips deep into the black forest
of dreams.
【在 s**t 的大作中提到】
: raindrops roll down the slope of sky
: and bounce back to the air from the seesaw of grasses
: i am a raindrop, a note
: detached from a tapestry of symphony
: leap on leaf-keys
: each leaf opens its eye
: at the moment the raindrop touches
: i am a raindrop, a note
: a drop of birdsong dripping from the void
: no vase can hold it
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s**t
发帖数: 17016 | 3 ^_^，这首是我写的英文诗里唯一让我觉得不错的。
【在 t********a 的大作中提到】
: 都是诗歌儿"惹的祸”～～
: 读到最后一句，
: My heart slips deep into the black forest
: of dreams.
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L****o
发帖数: 1642 | 4 这首英语语感很好。
【在 s**t 的大作中提到】
: raindrops roll down the slope of sky
: and bounce back to the air from the seesaw of grasses
: i am a raindrop, a note
: detached from a tapestry of symphony
: leap on leaf-keys
: each leaf opens its eye
: at the moment the raindrop touches
: i am a raindrop, a note
: a drop of birdsong dripping from the void
: no vase can hold it
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n*****r
发帖数: 2125 | |
w*a
发帖数: 2138 | 6 喜欢前半段多过后半段。finally这个词有没有让节奏断了一下？lands the ear of
sea我觉得少个介词……
【在 s**t 的大作中提到】
: raindrops roll down the slope of sky
: and bounce back to the air from the seesaw of grasses
: i am a raindrop, a note
: detached from a tapestry of symphony
: leap on leaf-keys
: each leaf opens its eye
: at the moment the raindrop touches
: i am a raindrop, a note
: a drop of birdsong dripping from the void
: no vase can hold it
|
s**t
发帖数: 17016 | 7 赞。确实少了个介词
【在 w*a 的大作中提到】
: 喜欢前半段多过后半段。finally这个词有没有让节奏断了一下？lands the ear of
: sea我觉得少个介词……
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