w**********o
发帖数: 407 | 1 Thinking about you all the time,
With a smile you are calling me dime.
Want to be with you in bed,
Since you are always in my head.
Even though you are far out there,
You are my world and all I care.
In your mind,
Don’t set up any wall,
I love you the way,
Love you all in all.
Keeping calling you by your name,
Dreamt that quietly along you came.
Running toward me in a dash,
Pulled off my robe on the sash.
Feeling warm even with all day snow,
Looking at your strong body lying below.
I have never dreamt such a sight,
With you by my side saying good-night. | p******e
发帖数: 4263 | 2 sf
【在 w**********o 的大作中提到】
: Thinking about you all the time,
: With a smile you are calling me dime.
: Want to be with you in bed,
: Since you are always in my head.
: Even though you are far out there,
: You are my world and all I care.
: In your mind,
: Don’t set up any wall,
: I love you the way,
: Love you all in all.
| G*********o
发帖数: 49669 | 3 你机器人？
sf
【在 p******e 的大作中提到】
: sf
| N****f
发帖数: 25759 | 4 In terms of structural coherence, I'd say this is one of your best among
those I remember.
In terms of English poetry, I'd say you are now up there with the best in
the field.
"I have never dreamt such a sight/With you by my side saying good-night"
—such a charming proclamation of love-induced silliness. :-)
【在 w**********o 的大作中提到】
: Thinking about you all the time,
: With a smile you are calling me dime.
: Want to be with you in bed,
: Since you are always in my head.
: Even though you are far out there,
: You are my world and all I care.
: In your mind,
: Don’t set up any wall,
: I love you the way,
: Love you all in all.
| C*******g
发帖数: 9288 | 5 斗胆问一句，你是爱妹妹吗？
【在 w**********o 的大作中提到】
: Thinking about you all the time,
: With a smile you are calling me dime.
: Want to be with you in bed,
: Since you are always in my head.
: Even though you are far out there,
: You are my world and all I care.
: In your mind,
: Don’t set up any wall,
: I love you the way,
: Love you all in all.
| N****f
发帖数: 25759 | 6 斗胆答一句，肯定不是。
【在 C*******g 的大作中提到】
: 斗胆问一句，你是爱妹妹吗？
| a****t
发帖数: 8616 | 7 ditto....
【在 N****f 的大作中提到】
: 斗胆答一句，肯定不是。
| w**********o
发帖数: 407 | 8 狼兄的评论让我不敢再写喽！到了巅峰势必要走下坡路。我不是谦虚，我的确不懂诗，
也学不来，所以也不可能进步。凭感觉吧。有感觉就接着写。
嘿嘿。
【在 N****f 的大作中提到】
: In terms of structural coherence, I'd say this is one of your best among
: those I remember.
: In terms of English poetry, I'd say you are now up there with the best in
: the field.
: "I have never dreamt such a sight/With you by my side saying good-night"
: —such a charming proclamation of love-induced silliness. :-)
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