n******8
发帖数: 558 | 1 虽然玩了几年了，这才第三次
Between black and white
Ginkgo biloba turns yellow
Maple turns red
And I as if turn teen
Gaze at you from far
Your hair
black
Your neck
white
Between black and white
hides the love I once had
The meadow by the lake turns green
Your dress flutters neon
And I bend down
to scoop with my empty hands
Soil under your feet
black
Summits in the distance
white
Between black and white
I'm waiting for your return
Rain turns blue
wet the melody of bell tolls
How can all my prayers
rise through those clouds
black
Falling snowflakes
white
Between black and white
I stroke the newborn moss
separations © 27 days ago, love • sad
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Comment - What did you think?
Likes: Nela Madjarac, AngelBee, HBey K, kaye, M. T., OniWong, hesychiaaaa,
Caramel latte, Natalie Grace33, RoddyTo reply, click a comment.
M. T. - The style and wording you used really appeals to me. Something
resonates that I can't quite pinpoint. Regardless, a beautiful piece.5
hours ago
HBey K - It is very suffering to wait for a so faithful love to be concrete
. Within the harsh separation hope and despair enhance the worry. Great and
meant expression!
Inspired me7 hours ago
OniWong - Between black and white
I'm waiting for your return
although It sounds sad, these poetic lines are heartfelt expressions. It
drags me to read to the last line. Great8 hours ago
AngelBee - i ike the sentence rain turns blue i loved the poem esecialy
melody of bel tolls feel free to comment on a world so deep poem id
appreciate it8 hours ago
Caramel latte - Great use of colours! "Between black and white" - no shades
of grey, because you're either with or without her, like this metaphor a lot
Enjoyed it27 days ago
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Front page pick 9 hours ago | wh
发帖数: 141625 | 2 哈哈，祝贺祝贺！最后一句很有希望的亮色，不过还是前面好快，最后一个moss好像给
我感觉和前面脱节似的，我也说不清楚。那个写黑白比喻的读者写得很棒，同感。第一
句前两个词就把我卡住了，我知道gingko，不知道还有ginkgo biloba的叫法。为什么
用这么复杂的词……ginkgo读起来还挺拗口，不如gingko好听，哈哈。
这首诗也让我想起齐豫翻唱的《Story》，我以前非常喜欢，还拿它做英语听力课的听
写材料。
【在 n******8 的大作中提到】
: 虽然玩了几年了，这才第三次
: Between black and white
: Ginkgo biloba turns yellow
: Maple turns red
: And I as if turn teen
: Gaze at you from far
: Your hair
: black
: Your neck
: white
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